Thursday, September 18, 2014

He Was Right There

         She was sure she left him right here. Alexia was positive she had left Jack in this very spot fast asleep only an hour ago. Alexia and Jack have been on the run from their family for three days. They have been camping in the woods not having enough money to purchase a hotel room and be able to buy food. Alexia had left Jack at their camp an hour ago to get food while he was sleeping so he wouldn't worry about being alone. Jack delays their timing since he is only 5 years old. Since he can't walk as fast, Alexia often leaves while is sleeping to get what they need. She figured he would be fine since she was just going to the gas station just outside the woods to get them some food  for the night. But things turned for the worst when she got back to camp. Jack was no where to be found . Immediately Alexia starts calling for her little brother to  find him. She hears something in the bushes and thinks it could be Jack. Alexia makes her way to the bushes and then everything goes black and right before she can hear the soft cries of her brother and at that moment she knows they had found them..

2 comments:

  1. It was suspenseful, you left out "he" in line six.

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  2. Make sure you fix the use of contractions in this post. I love the suspense and creativity.

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